My Creepypasta Oc

and what appears to be my 666th deviantation.
O_O spooky

anyways this is a story of one of the boys in the brick red factory.
the one who died in a fernis 
a group of four boys went exploring in the dark woods one night.
when one of them noticed three tall stacks peering over the shadowy trees
'they look like factory stacks' said one of the doys.
jock was an artis and he reconizes almost anything he sees.
finally one said 'lets go there' some knew the danger of an abandoned
facility but not like the ones theyre about to incounter
once they got in they split up. what they didint realise is that
they where being watched...

jocks side:
he was in the boiler room where a cold fernis was wide open
he was just looking when he heard a girl crying... inside the furnis.
jock peered inside only to find a five yaer old girl on her knees
crying. jock was concerned. this wasnt the kind of place to get lost.
the place was about as big as ten walmarts in seperate sections.
he was about to aks the girl if shes lost. she was wearing a ragged jacket so he couldnt see her
head. as he touched her jacket. it desolved into a massive fire.
and before he tryed to run the door was already closed on him. he gasp for breath the flames swirled around
him just about to cunsome him alive. as the flames grew close he swere he could see the little
girl... but this time she was smiling as she said. now you can play with me forever.
jock was terrified for he saw the girls face before he was burned alive.
she had an erie look like she was a living doll made out of a real human girl.
the girls face is all jock had seen before he was nothing but ash and cynders.

and from that day on he haunts the facility
as a ghostly figure. the one they call charc.

base:

flames borrowed from the internet